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a poem about how we feel when we are young
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By: McPimpy
when we are young
there is no care in the world
we go around in a stupor
thinking we are invincible
in reality we are no more invincible
then the ants on the ground
or the monkey's in the trees
but we still have the dream
when we are young
you dont think about wrong or right
you just create havoc
and consequences be damned
then when you get in trouble you
you pout and pant saying you are innocent
but in reality you need to give up
finally you learn your lesson
but a little too late
you have already created enough havoc
you try to apologize but they dont listen
should've learned easier
wishing for the trouble to end
but you go on without a care in the world
anymore than when you began
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Founded by Steve & Judy
This was a little confusing, but I think I get what you mean. You sound very frustrated here. But I enjoyed this poem. I think a lot of young people feel this way.