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By: McPimpy

Love is supposed to be an eternal bond

but we can never get it right

we go far and beyond

but cant get through the night

we see a girl we might like

so we try our luck

we get shot down like a pike

and we just sit there stuck

so we mope in our self pity

instead of going on with life

when it comes down to the nitty-gritty

all we want is a nice wife

we go through life wanting a simple pleasure

but in reality life has other plans

some of us try to find our priceless treasure

so we can put it in our own hands

life is unpredictable

go through it without a hitch

or take the wrong turn

and hit a huge ditch

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judy_ann

Keep working at it. Your voice and experience is young as we all were once, so it's all to familiar. Im grateful of the fact that you want so much more for yourself. Hold on to that it will serve you well in the future. Looking forward to seeing you grow in your writings.

November 2, 2014
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Will

This suggests the pain of the frustrated young man. Truth be told, it also suggests the pain of the frustrated old man. Good poem.

November 3, 2014
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Dasmeer

Pace yourself, kid. Get a few things under your belt before you go looking for a wife! (you'll be sorry!) hahahaha

November 3, 2014
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