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a time
By: McPimpy
I think of a time when all was fine
when everything was like a fine wine
but i dont see a time like that
when i look back i feel like a mat
I was always getting stepped on
at one time i felt like my mind was gone
so i went and made myself harder
but everyone treated me like a martyr
so i just distanced myself
but everyone wouldnt stay away themselves
i started to lash out
and they just used me like grout
so i kept it up
but now everyone is fed up
when i try to explain
they say im a pain
so now i just stay in one place so they cant start
they leave me alone for the most part
but they bring out everything deep
and i cant wait for the eternal sleep
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Will
Bad as all that, eh? This is so depressing. Hang in there great poet! Hang in there!!! lol
- November 3, 2014
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Bad as all that, eh? This is so depressing. Hang in there great poet! Hang in there!!! lol